planning document second draft

I have included my first draft as well as teacher feedback.

Feedback:

Introduction: Issue: You have chosen an interesting topic and I can see its significance in your description. Another concern with GMOs is how they may impact biodiversity. You can read more about this here: http://sitn.hms.harvard.edu/flash/2015/challenging-evolution-how-gmos-can-influence-genetic-diversity/
Introduction: Science Resources: It looks like you have a great list of credible sources related to your topic. Nice work!
Introduction: Specific Question: You have a good question. Now you should begin to think about how you can write it in a way that will let you find the answer scientifically. Scientific questions are answered by either direct observation or experimentation. Here are 2 additional resources that help when writing and deciding on “good” scientific questions: https://oepos.ca.uky.edu/files/asking_good_scientific_questions.pdf and https://bml.ucdavis.edu/wp-content/pdf/cameos/CAMEOS_FormingAnswerableScientificQuestionswnotes.pdf
Body: Audience: You have chosen a good audience. I think educating the general public in real-life science issues is important. I also like that you are cratering to an audience who will need to directly apply this information (i.e. farmers).
Body: Message: I love how you described how to disperse the information. How would you change your writing and presenting to better serve this audience? Not only how you would get the message out, but how would you write the message to be easily understood by your audience? I posted this article elsewhere in the course, but here it is again in case you may find it useful when thinking about your audience: http://sites.ieee.org/pcs/communication-resources-for-engineers/audience-purpose-and-context/understand-your-audience/
Body: Explain Principle(s): Way to think scientifically! You have correctly identified some basic scientific principles related to GMOS and insects and how they relate to your question and sources.
Reference List: Your reference list looks like it is properly formatted in APA style.
Articulation of Response: Writing looks good, your thoughts are communicated clearly.

SECOND DRAFT:

Overview: In Themes 1 and 2, you identified an issue, developed a research question, and examined sources that could help you explore the issue. You also considered the scientific principles related to your topic, and how you might communicate your findings to a specific audience. Building on these elements in this theme, you will formulate a hypothesis related to your issue. Then, applying what you learned in Theme 1 about the process of science, you will explain the next steps that natural scientists would take to support or refute your hypothesis. What kind of evidence would they look for? What kind of tests they need to conduct? Throughout this course, you explored a variety of specific cases in which natural scientists addressed issues, tested hypotheses, and developed solutions to problems. Many of their solutions have become key discoveries that we rely on today for health, safety, and other practical uses. So, as you consider your hypothesis and the next steps a scientist would take, reflect back on these examples. This reflection is the final piece of your planning document, and you will use it to develop your presentation in Theme 4.

Prompt: You will build on the elements you composed in your first draft and develop your hypothesis. After you have your hypothesis, explain what steps a Natural Scientist would take to either refute or support your hypothesis. By the end of Theme Three you will fine tune the entire planning document to be submitted to your instructor.

Specifically, the following critical elements must be addressed:

1. Introduction: At this point, you should have received feedback from your instructor. For this second draft, review and make any necessary revisions or adjustments to the following elements:
   1. Describe the issue in the natural sciences that you have selected to investigate. Why is this issue significant? (You identified this issue in Theme 1, but how would you revise this piece now that you have received instructor feedback and investigated your sources?)
   2. Describe at least three science resources that you could use to investigate the issue you selected. Your sources must be relevant to your issue and must be of an academic nature appropriate for the issue. In your description, consider questions such as: What are the similarities and differences in the content of your sources? What makes them appropriate and relevant for investigating your issue? What was your thought process when you were searching for sources? How did you make choices?
   3. Based on your review of science resources, develop a specific question related to the issue you selected. In other words, what would you like to know more about?
2. Body: You should also receive instructor feedback about this section and continue to consider your evidence. For this second draft, review these sections and make any necessary revisions or adjustments to the following elements:
   1. Identify an audience that would be interested in your issue and the question you developed. For example, who would benefit most from hearing your message, or who could best help in addressing the issue?
   2. Describe how and why you can tailor your message to your audience, providing specific examples. For example, will your audience understand scientific terminology and principles, or will you need to explain them? How will you communicate effectively with your audience?
   3. Identify the natural science principle(s) that apply to your question and issue. For example, if your issue is global climate change, the principleyou might identify is that the sun is the primary source of energy for Earth’s climate system.

d. Explain how the principle(s) you identified apply to your issue and question. In other words, how are the natural science principle(s) you identified relevant to your question and issue?

1. Conclusion: In this section, you will conclude your research investigation by discussing future directions for research related to your question. Specifically, you should:
   1. Formulate a hypothesis that addresses the question you developed. Make sure your hypothesis is based on your investigation of your question.
   2. Explain how a natural scientist would go about collecting evidence to support or refute the hypothesis you formulated. In other words, whatwould the next steps be if a natural scientist were to continue researching your hypothesis? Make sure to support your response with the natural science resources that you selected.
2. Provide a reference list that includes all of the science resources you used to investigate your issue and question so far. Apply feedback from your instructor to ensure that your list is formatted according to current APA guidelines (or another format, with instructor permission).Rubric

Guidelines for Submission: The second draft of your planning document should be 3–5 pages, double spaced, with 12-point Times New Roman font and one-inch margins. You should use current APA guidelines (or another format approved by your instructor) for your citations and reference list.